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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Most people think that the truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to the news. Do you think all news is true? What is the function of a newspaper?

The vast majority of
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 believe that the published information
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should be
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evidence-based
 data from reliable references, rather than personal opinion, depend on emotion, feelings, or
politics
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a political
 agenda. I firmly believe that any written or
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presented
news
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 to the audience should be under the control of publishment standardized principles
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,
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 what recently
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happened
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 of delivering the
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, manipulating and
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 the fact is the cornerstone for misinformation and false interpretation.
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, the majority of published data is
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inaccurate
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 truly describe the reality.
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, the fact of separating
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 or fake
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belonging to
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 personal and financial benefits for the journalist.
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, some popular
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 amount of money to distribute
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sensitive information to gain attention towards them in order to increase
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popularity and gain more light on
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 personal life.
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this
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 action can attract more
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 to follow them
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 social media. The function of a
news
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 whether was a
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paper-based
 or digital context aim to keep
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individuals
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 updated about what
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around
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 them.
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, advertisement allows
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 to share experiences and their successful stories, tools of communication
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 shape minds with positive
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knowledge,
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 contributed in the growth of their community. It is mandatory
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 publish instruments extracted from clear and realistic sources before
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 to the public. In conclusion, I totally believe that the majority of the
news
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 is not completely clear from mistakes and propaganda that
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people
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 to believe something
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contrary to
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 their faith.
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, social members should be more careful about the
publtished
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published
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such
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, such
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 as videos and
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pictures
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 the situation.

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Answer both questions more directly. Say clearly if all news is true, and say the main job of a newspaper in a simple way.
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Use ideas that are easy to follow. Some parts are hard to understand because the meaning is not clear.
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Give one or two clear examples that fit your main point. Your example about famous people is not fully clear.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea for each body paragraph. This will help your essay feel more ordered.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result, but do not use too many.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar, because some sentences are too long and mixed, so the reader can get lost.
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You gave your opinion from the start, so the reader knows your main view.
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You tried to answer both parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your writing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • objective reporting
  • subjective interpretation
  • media bias
  • misinformation
  • journalistic integrity
  • editorial standards
  • fact-checking
  • watchdog role
  • public opinion
  • newsworthy
  • ethical journalism
  • credible sources
  • press freedom
  • sensationalism
  • media literacy
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