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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both views anf give your opinion ?

In the modern era, there is considerable debate over whether
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 or digital platforms are better for gaining
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knowledge about the world.
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 essay will discuss both viewpoints, and my opinion is presented in the conclusion. On the one hand, some proponents argue that
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newspapers
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 are the most effective way to read
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news
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the news
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.
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 is because articles generally go through different stages of evaluation, ensuring that the
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 is accurate and reliable.
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, the general public trusts the content
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 which they are consuming.
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, there are a number of
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,
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 as The Tribune, Ajit
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, and Daily
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, which are well-known in India because of their reliable content.
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, some
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 controlled by the government, which may contain biased
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.
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, I contend that some search engines,
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 as Google, Facebook, and Instagram, are the best
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 of
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. Some experienced and honest journalists have started their own channels on them, providing instant and accurate
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 with videos and pictures. It is not only beneficial for illiterate people but
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 for those with visual impairments.
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, Ravish Kumar, a journalist and an author, has a channel
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 widely followed by individuals on both YouTube and Instagram. He usually publishes true content with facts
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 people can trust him.
To conclude
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newspapers
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 are evaluated in some parts of the world before being published, I contend that online platforms are the most important method to read
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. Ultimately, search engines offer instant
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 with audio and video, which would be useful.

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Answer both sides in a more equal way. Your view is clear, but the side for newspapers is a bit short.
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Give more direct reasons for each side and explain them more.
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Use examples that fit better. Google, Facebook, and Instagram are not all search engines.
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Keep word use accurate. Some ideas are clear, but a few lines sound strange, so meaning is not fully strong.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this shape.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
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Make each main point stronger with one more line of support.
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Check small grammar and word form errors because they can make links less smooth.
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You discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Your opinion is clear in the second body part and the end.
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You use examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs.
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The introduction and conclusion are both present.
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Most ideas follow in a logical order.
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