Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over recent years, more and more people have been
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that
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tomorrow is
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of time, it is essential
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to focus
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or not.
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we have to
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concentrate
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activities and enjoy
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pastimes, I am mostly of the opinion that it is necessary to
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about our future. Admittedly, to be lost among the plans of the next years that we try
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can be stressful and lead to depression. If we consider that it is unworkable to forecast what event will
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happen in our life, we cannot plan all
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sudden incident that
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not organised, may
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create
confusion in people's thinking.
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generation may change their
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day by day.
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my perspective, it can be wrong to ponder desicion of the future. If we update our lifestyle, it
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our thinking.

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Answer all parts of the question. Say clearly how much you agree or disagree.
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Give one clear main idea in each body paragraph and explain it more.
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Add a real and clear example to support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, 2 body paragraphs, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, so, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect to the one before it. Avoid sudden jumps.
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You tried to give your opinion in the introduction.
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You gave reasons about stress and change in life.
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Your essay has paragraph breaks.
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You used some linking words like although, in addition, and if.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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