In recent years, many people have adopted a minimalistic lifestyle, choosing to own only essential possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of living?

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I would like to talk about what
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actually is.
Minimalism
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is a lifestyle some people choose. Minimalists keep the bare minimum of their belongings in their homes, throwing away anything they deem unnecessary.
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kind of life can either help or worsen a
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life.
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a question comes to mind
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what are the advantages and drawbacks of
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?
Minimalism
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usually has a positive effect on both the resident and the planet. People who don’t keep a lot of possessions don't buy many either.
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can help beat consumerism and wastefulness, two
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problems today. Consumerism encourages impressionable people, who don't know any better, to purchase stuff currently trending on the internet. After the wave settles and a new one emerges, the individuals realise they have purchased items they don’t need anymore,
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are forced to throw them out. The useless products end up in landfills, which eventually become overfilled with tons of rubbish. The trash pollutes the air, water and soil.
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, keeping a small amount of
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makes it very easy to move places. Of course,
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lifestyle
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has its disadvantages.
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has become very popular
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social media. Minimalists work tirelessly to keep their homes bare and perfect for the cameras. Keeping one’s home like
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causes a lot of stress, constantly worrying about what possessions to throw out or keep. These individuals throw out almost everything they purchase, sometimes even belongings that they actually need.
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, most minimalist homes look very boring and plain. In conclusion,
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has its pros and cons just like any other lifestyle. Minimalists learn how to keep the bare minimum to survive, helping the planet greatly.
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way of living
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makes a person look boring.

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For task response: your last line says this life makes a person look boring. This is too general. Explain why in a clearer way.
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For task response: you discussed both advantages and disadvantages, so you answered the full question.
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For task response: you gave a clear example about waste, landfills, and pollution.
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For coherence and cohesion: words like 'Of course', 'Lastly', and 'In conclusion' help the reader follow your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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  • secondly
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  • in additional
  • moreover
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  • for example
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  • despite
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