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Band 3

Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world.whybis this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?do

In recent years, there has been
growing
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 debate about whether solar
energy
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becoming
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is becoming
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a
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as
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 popular as a source of household
in
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energy in
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 many places worldwide
,
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while
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this
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 trend offers benefits, it
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 has more drawbacks.
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 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages.  One main reason is, that solar
energy
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 consumption developing is because many individuals who lives in the countryside do not have the ability to obtain a
energy
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 source whether it was electricity or natural gas, which increases the amount of using of solar
energy
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, to illustrate, residence finds the solar
energy
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 as a renewable
energy
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 source and it cheaper
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 electricity, the advantages of the natural sources it decreases the risk of air pollution and reduces the government expenditure.
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, the disadvantages of
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apply
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natural
energy
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is
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 not strong enough to power
a
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apply
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large areas because it
depneds
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depends
 on the
energy
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bored
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source
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,
which
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which,
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 whether
changing
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changing,
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 can affect
on
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apply
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the power of
energy
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,
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.
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, when it is
rain
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rainy
 or windy
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, it
decline
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decreases
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 the possibility of a
highed powered
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high-powered
 system. In conclusion,
although
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 solar
energy
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renewable
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is renewable
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 and more affordable, governments do not prefer it because it depends on whether
unless
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it
saving
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saves
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 the
obsorbed
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absorbed
energy
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 and
using
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uses
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 it at night or
cloudy
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on cloudy
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whether
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days
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task response
Answer all parts of the task more clearly. Say why solar energy is popular, then give clear good points and bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Use more clear main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph can be about reasons and good points, and one paragraph can be about bad points.
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Support each main point with a simple and real example. Your example now is a bit hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence short and clear. Some sentences are too long, so the meaning is not easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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You talk about both good points and bad points of solar energy.
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You try to give an example to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable
  • Finite
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Initial setup costs
  • Electricity bills
  • Environmental concerns
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Climate change
  • Government incentives
  • Subsidies
  • Rebates
  • Technological advancements
  • Efficiency
  • Viable option
  • Installation costs
  • Dependency
  • Overcast weather
  • Backup energy sources
  • Toxic materials
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