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The graph below shows four categories of fruits that produced in (in million kg) and in one Australian state in 1995,2005 and 2015.

The bar chart compares the number of fruit
production
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 in Australia state in 1995,2005,2015.
Overall
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, fruit
production
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 depicted mixed trends, apple
production
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 illustrated a rise to lead by the end of the period,
while
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 pears followed the opposite pattern and declined. Meanwhile, oranges and peaches increased slightly over time. There was an apple
production
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 in Australia, which stood at 80
million
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kg
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 in 1995 and rose steadily to around 120
million
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kg
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 in 2015.
In contrast
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, pears were the most produced fruit at approximately 135
million
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kg
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 in 1995, but their
production
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 fell considerably to 80
million
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kg
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 by the end of the period. Oranges increased gradually from 70
million
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kg
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 in 1995 to roughly 90
million
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kg
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 in 2005.
Similarly
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, peach
production
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 stood at around 40
million
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kg
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 to approximately 70
million
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kg
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, showing a moderate upward trend.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, million, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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