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Some people think that working from home is better than working in an office, while others believe that working in an office is more effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe working from
home
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more
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better than
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office
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the office
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,
while
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 others think working in
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office
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the office
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 is more active. In my
opinion
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 working in
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office
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the office
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butter
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better
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 than
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home
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at home
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 . Working from
home
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 has beneficial ,but
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 has negative aspects,
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 the don’t have any way to do anything except in computer,
in
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addition
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 some
work
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 in
computer
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 same building hoses , schools and hospitals and
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other
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 buildings
,
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therefore
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working
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, working
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 in offices is more
butter
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beneficial
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 than homes. In other hand
working
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, working
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 from
home
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 is more comfortable than
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office
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the office
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, because employees can
work
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 near
theirs
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their
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 families
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in
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addition
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addition,
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 they can wear
any thing
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anything
 they want
,
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 when
he or she
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they
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work
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work,
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 they can
doing
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do
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work
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 under
blanket
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a blanket
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 , because
that
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employees like working from hose than anywhere else . In conclusions working
in
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at
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home
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 or working in
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office
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an office
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they have
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has
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 both positive and negative aspects ,
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however
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apply
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 it’s depend on how
is
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your environment
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work
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works
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 and what you like to do.

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Answer both sides more clearly. Say why home work is good and why office work is good.
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Give your opinion in a clear way from the start and keep it the same in all parts.
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Add one or two clear examples for each side. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body part. Then explain it with a short example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and for example.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some parts are hard to follow because ideas jump too fast.
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You wrote about both home work and office work.
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You gave your opinion and you kept it in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like in addition, for example, and however.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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