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Some people believe that all children should learn a foreign language from the time they start school, while others feel it is better to start until a child is at secondary school. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some proponents argue that a second
language
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 should be taught to children
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 their primary school. At
this
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 stage, their brain is developing, making it easier for them to absorb new information quickly. Unlike adults, they cannot only mimic words and sounds but
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 grab things effectively,
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 as grammar, synonyms
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 antonyms, and vocabulary. It allows them to speak fluently like a native.
On the other hand
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, I believe that learners should learn an international
language
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 at their school.
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because
 it can create
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 on them since they usually do not have a proper command
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of
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 their mother
language
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.
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, learning a new
language
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 can create
confusions
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 among them, making them
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 to distinguish the words
,
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apply
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 and accents of two languages.

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Write about both sides in a full way. Now you give one side, but the other side is very short and not clear.
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Give your own opinion in a clear line. Your view changes, so the reader is not sure what you think.
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Add one or two real examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear essay plan: intro, one body part for side one, one body part for side two, and a short end.
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Link ideas with easy words like first, also, however, because, and in the end.
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Make each sentence connect to the next one. Some parts jump too fast.
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You answer the topic and talk about the age to start a foreign language.
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You show two different ideas, so you understand the question.
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Your writing has basic paragraph shape.
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You use some linking words like on the other hand and therefore.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cultural awareness
  • Enhanced communication skills
  • Neuroplasticity
  • Language acquisition
  • Pedagogical methods
  • Curriculum constraints
  • Workload
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Adaptability
  • Personal experience
  • Critical thinking
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