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Band 3

Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it’s popular and how does it affect society?

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modern
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, watching
crime
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-oriented movies and television programmes
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 popular
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people
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 from several ages, including young
people
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 and old
people
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. I will explain some reasons related to
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 popularity and their key impacts
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society
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. Upon reflecting on the
crime
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although
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 the screems its clear that
people
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is
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 curious and they are searching strongs emotions, so watching
crime
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 is a way for gettting that despite there are several options diferent that seeing violence on
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television. In 2020, Harvard University
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developed
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 what
happen
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happens
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 in the brain when
people
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is
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 watching
crime
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 on
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television.
Surprinsingly
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, they discovered that
people
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 enjoy the
crime
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-oriented movies and
tv
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TV
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 programmes
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 they feel scared and
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anxious
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 research included 200
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, women and
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,
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 three years.
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 several universities and social study
centers
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, mainly based in North America and Europe, despite
people
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like
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this
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programmes
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programme
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 and movies, there are several effects
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society
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such
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 us normalise the violence in many ways, when it comes
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 oppossite because we need peaceful
behavior
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instead
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 agresive acts. In conclusion, even though the consumption of
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crime
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on
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 audiovisual productions is increasing
caused
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 curiosity and looking for emotions, without doubt
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tendences
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tendency
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 is affecting our
society
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generating
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ansiety
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anxiety
 and
agresive behavior
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aggressive behaviour
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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Say more about why crime shows are popular and more about how they change people and society.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer main ideas in each body part. One body part can be about reasons, and one body part can be about effects.
coherence and cohesion
Add simple linking words like first, also, for example, and as a result to help the reader follow your ideas.
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Give examples that are clear and easy to trust. Your study example is interesting, but it needs to be explained in a more simple and direct way.
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You answered both parts of the question: popularity and effect on society.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to support your ideas with an example from a study.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intricate plots
  • Suspenseful storytelling
  • Unexpected twists
  • Psychological appeal
  • Curiosity
  • Safe exploration
  • Criminal behavior
  • Relatability
  • Identification
  • Pursuit of justice
  • Moral dilemmas
  • Human struggle
  • Educational aspect
  • Law enforcement system
  • Practical self-defense tips
  • Raise awareness
  • Social commentary
  • Corruption
  • Inequality
  • Effectiveness of the justice system
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