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Writing Samples
Band 7

The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show
Pacific
Correct article usage
the Pacific
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 Railway Station in 1998 and the present day. We can see that the station has been expanded, with significantly more facilities available to customers now compared with 1998.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the station has been developed
and
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, and
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 the number of
platforms
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 has increased. In 1998, there were only four
platforms
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but
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, but
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 today there are seven. A restaurant has been added between the new and old
platforms
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and
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, and
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 the number of shops has grown, as there are now two shops situated next to the restaurant
and
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, and
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 the old shop has been removed. The ticket office remains in the same place but has been extended and is now much larger. The Café has
also
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 stayed in roughly the same place, which is at the bottom of the old
platforms
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. The toilets were previously in a separate building next to the
platforms
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, but they have now disappeared. A new supermarket has been built at the bottom of the new
platforms
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words platforms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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