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Band 3

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
The increasingly of
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people
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people's
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 trust that they need
save
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to save
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their
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apply
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all
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money
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the money
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 they earn and should not give payment
tax
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 to the
state
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. Some
people
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 usually agree with
this
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veiw point
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viewpoint
.
while
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opthers
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others
 disagree with
this
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 perspective. I truly believe that
the
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apply
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people
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 need
pay
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to pay
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tax
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taxes
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 to the
state
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 .
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, have you ever thought
think
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apply
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about how
us the
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apply
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the
state
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 of our
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tax
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taxes
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? We need
pay
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to pay
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 a
tax
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for
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to the
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state
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beacuse
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because
 the president of every
country
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use
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uses
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this
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tax
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 to help poor
families
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 and
also
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 invest it to eduaction.
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, nowadays, every
country
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focus
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focuses
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 more to improve the education and
also
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 assist to low-income
families
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byconstructing
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by constructing
 plans like building
house
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houses
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 for poor
families
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 or create library for children. All these plans
requres
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require
money
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to
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from
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 the
state
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 so that the
state
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give
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can give
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 taxes
from
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to
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 us
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Therefore
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, the
country
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 can
seperate
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separate
 subsidies for poor
families
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 from suffered from
homeles
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homelessness
 and
also
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 income.As
result
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a result
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 , the
sate
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state
 can
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enhance
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 the environment of
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country
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the country
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. So, we need
pay
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to pay
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 more
pils
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pills
 for
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state
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the state
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.
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, if
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state
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the state
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give
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gives
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 us
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tax
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taxes
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, they use it for good things.
Conclusion
In conclusion, many
people
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 believe they need not pay
tax
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 for
sate
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state
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.
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, the
tax
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used
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is used
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in
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for
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 the
most good
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best
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 jobs
like
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, such as
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 investing
money
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 or
give
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giving
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 subsidies
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money
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apply
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to poor
families
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. So, we need
pay
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to pay
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tax
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 for
state
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due to
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 these
problem
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problems
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.

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task response
Give a clear answer from the start. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same idea in all parts.
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Add more clear main ideas. Each body part should have one main point and then explain it well.
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Use one real and clear example to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas link in a simple way. Use words like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in one paragraph. Do not jump to a new idea too fast.
coherence and cohesion
Explain each point more before you move to the next one.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to give examples about school and poor families.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear paragraph style.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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