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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
films
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originated
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produced
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 by five countries in
three
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 year
such
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 as 2007,2008 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most produced
films
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 are
at a
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in
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country
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A
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A,
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while
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 the low rate of
producing
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production
 is
at a
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in
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country
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 E. The
country
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 A
originated
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produced
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 the more amount of
films
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 in
three
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years
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.
However
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, in 2007
year
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apply
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,
this
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country
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 produced the less ration
films
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rather
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apply
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than
2007
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in 2007
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ansd
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and
 2008. The
figure
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 of 2007 and 2008
shows
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show
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 the same above
of
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apply
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75
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while
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, while
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 that of 2009 depicts
the
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apply
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less
above
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than
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 75.
On the other hand
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 , the
country
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 E made the same in
three
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years
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but
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, but
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this
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figure
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 is less compared to ther countires.
This
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 data shows above
of
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apply
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zero in
three
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 periods.
Therefore
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, the other countries like B, c and
also
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 D created the some quatity of
films
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 in
three
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years
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.
THe
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The
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 more producing
films
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 among these
three
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countires
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countries
 is
a
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apply
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country
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 B
and
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, and
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 the count of created
films
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 is 50
at
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in
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 2007 and 2008
and
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, and
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 over
period
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the period
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,
this
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 information
icreased
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increased
 in 2009
and
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, and
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 the
figure
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 depicts a hit of 50.
However
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,
the
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apply
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countries like C and D produced
the less amount of
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fewer
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films
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 compared to
country
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 B in 2007, 2008 and 2009
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apply
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years
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. The count of C
country
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 is above
of
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apply
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zero
while
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 over
period
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the period
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 it increased
lessly
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slightly
 and in 2009,
this
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figure
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incresed
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increased
 steadily compared to 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, three, country, years, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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