this graph below shows avarege carbon dioxide (co2)emissions per person in the united kingdom, sweden, italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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CO2
consemption
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consumption
per citizen in four countries (united kingdom,
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sweden
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, italy and
portugal
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Portugal
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) from 1967 to 2007.
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,
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the UK
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and
Sweden
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decreased over the
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but
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still
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the UK
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had the lead
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Sweden
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was
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second in first place, after
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it became the
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.
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, Italy and Portugal jumped
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through
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gradually 0,5
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to around 3
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between 1967 and 1987 before
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to
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approximately
5
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in the year 1997 and
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had a very small increase over the
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. Italy was near 4
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in 1967, after
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improvement to just above 6
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Italy
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slightly recovered around 7.5
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in 1997 and remained constant over 2007.
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Kingdom was
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approximately
11.5
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in the first place
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after
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had a around 2
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downfall to just next to 9.5
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.
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Sweden
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was above 8
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then
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catched UK in 1977 with around 10
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and
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after a dramatic
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decline,
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it fell to
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approximately
7
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and
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minimally
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dropped to around 5
tonnes
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, years, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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