In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Nowadays, the number of students leaving their own countries to study abroad has decreased.
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there are some advantages and disadvantages. I am going to discuss
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essay and give my personal opinion. One major advantage of  studying abroad
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we will have the opportunity to get to know the cultures, places and people from all around the world.
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, many students choose to study at universities
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as the University of Bologna, and it can be the greatest
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that they have ever taken, as it
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them to get to know people who
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significant part of their life.
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, living alone
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himself better and to be
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, one major disadvantage of studying abroad  concerns  economical situation, which becomes evident when the student has no money to manage
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. Studying abroad isn’t free, and not everyone’s economy is sufficient for
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event. The second drawback is
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loneliness can
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depression itself.
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leaves his own country, his family, close friends
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it can bring a huge loneliness to
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he doesn’t know the new culture and
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around
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. In conclusion, in my opinion, I would recommend to every student to take an opportunity like
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if they can, as it might be the only moment
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lives where they can
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experience what
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like to live in another place.
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, students have to prepare for all the flaws that
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experience might have.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say more about why study abroad is good and bad.
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Your opinion is clear at the end, but say it more clearly in the introduction too.
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Use more clear and direct examples to support each main idea.
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Put ideas in a more even way. One paragraph for advantages and one for disadvantages is good, but each point needs fuller support.
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Check linking words. Some are good, like 'Conversely' and 'In conclusion', but some sentences do not join smoothly.
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Make sentence flow more clear by using short and simple sentence forms.
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You answered the question and talked about both advantages and disadvantages.
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You gave a clear ending with your own view.
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The essay has a clear basic structure: introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You used some linking words to guide the reader.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural awareness
  • adaptability
  • academic opportunities
  • specialized programs
  • prestigious courses
  • language proficiency
  • professional network
  • globalized job market
  • personal development
  • independence
  • life skills
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