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Teachers are more important than technology. Agree or disagree?

‏The role of
teachers
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 in society is essential
and
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 there is no technology tool
could
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 replace it.I definitely agree with
this
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 idea. ‏
To begin
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 with,
teachers
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 transfer not only different knowledge, but they
prepare
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also prepare
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 learners to be great members of a community.A successful tutor can make a lasting impact in his/her students’ lives by teaching them to be confident , optimistic , and determined.
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, technical tools ,
such
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 as AI programs and other online
resources
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resources,
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 will not be able to function well in terms of
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 these life skills for youth.
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, many students get better jobs and positions
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 they still remember the
encouragements
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 that they had from their
teachers
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.Being supportive with learners can lead to better grades and solve issues
that
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related to low self-esteem .As many
of
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apply
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teenagers in their early age may face these types of conditions,
so
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apply
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 being friendly as a teacher will raise their motivation to study.Unfortunately, engaging
Ai
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AI
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 tools or virtual classes will cause many problems, because
teachers
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 must be present and vigilant to notice the
students
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students'
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 behaviours to prevent any possible problem. In conclusion, the views about engaging
Ai
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AI
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 tools and technology in teaching are extremely wide and different , but
i
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I
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 believe that the presence of
teacher
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a teacher
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 in the classroom is sustainable and has a plethora of benefits.In many aspects of the educational process , the tutors
make
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do
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 a great job
and
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, and
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 they can manage all possible situations.

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task response
For task response: answer the question in a more direct way in each body part. Say clearly why teachers are more important, then add one clear reason.
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For task response: use one or two real and clear examples. This will make your ideas stronger and easier to believe.
task response
For task response: develop each main idea more. Some points are good, but they need more detail and fuller support.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: make your sentences shorter and clearer. Some lines are hard to follow because they are too long.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use linking words with care. Words like 'however', 'in other words', and 'so' should fit the meaning exactly.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: organize each paragraph around one main idea only. This will make the essay easier to read.
task response
For task response: your opinion is clear from the start, and you stay with the same side to the end.
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For task response: you give relevant ideas about support, life skills, and teacher care.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: you use paragraphing well, and the order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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