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The chart below shows how frequently people in the us are in fast food restaurants between year 2003 and 2013.

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The bar chart illustrates how often
people
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 in the US were eating fast
food
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 between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, an observable increase in a certain period of time for
people
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 who eat once a week;
however
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, the data is descending when it comes to never eating fast
food
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 in all years mentioned. Almost a percentage of 5 for
people
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 who eat fast
food
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 every day in the US in 2003, and less than 5 per
cent
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 in 2006 and 2013.
In contrast
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,
people
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 who never eat fast
food
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 between 2003, 2006 and 2013 are very rare, which contain 5% and less. A noticeable increase for
people
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 who eat once a week, about 33 per
cent
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 in 2006 and close to 28 per
cent
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 in 2013.
Nevertheless
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, a simliar data showed that
people
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 eat once or twice a month about 30 per
cent
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 in 2003 and nearly 33 per
cent
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 in 2013.
Moreover
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,
people
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 who ate a few times a year in 2006 and 2013 are in the exact same range, which is about 15 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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