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Band 4.5

The pie chart below show the average house hold expenditures im Japan and Malaysia.

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The given charts depict figures for the average household expenses in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. It is obvious that individuals were required to pay most finance to other goods and
service
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while
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 they had to spend the least money on health care
In
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 Japan. In terms of Malaysia , housing
wast
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was
 the most expensive household,
whereas
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 healthcare became the cheapest.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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