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Band 3

in order to study at universities, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
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 the cost of
university
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education
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 has become very high, and many
students
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 struggle to pay tuition fees.
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this
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 reason, some
people
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 believe that higher
education
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 should be free for everyone. I partly agree with
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 opinion, because it can bring benefits but
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 some problems. On the one hand, free
education
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 can give
equal
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an equal
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 chance to all
students
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. Many young
people
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 are smart
but
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, but
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 they cannot study because their families
dont
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don't
 have enough money. If
university
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 is free, more
people
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 can become doctors, teachers and engineers.
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 is good for society and country development.
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, it can reduce inequality between rich and poor
people
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.
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, making
university
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 free is not easy for governments. It needs a lot of money and may cause higher taxes.
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, some
students
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 may not study seriously if they
dont
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don't
 pay for
education
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. They can waste time and resources.
As a result
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,
this
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 system may not be effective in practice. In conclusion, I believe that
university
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education
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 should not be completely free, but it should be more affordable. Governments should help
students
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 with scholarships or financial support.

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Answer the question more fully. You say you partly agree, but you can explain your position more clearly in each body part.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your main ideas. This will make your points stronger.
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Develop each main point a bit more. Some ideas are good, but they are short and not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end, which is good.
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Use linking words carefully and add a few more where needed, such as 'for example' or 'therefore'.
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Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and explain it step by step.
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You answer the topic directly and give a clear opinion.
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Your ideas are relevant to the question.
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The essay is easy to follow because the paragraphs are clear.
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You have both an introduction and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tuition fees
  • financial background
  • equal opportunities
  • economic growth
  • educated workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • tax revenues
  • devaluation of degrees
  • financial burden
  • higher taxes
  • essential services
  • perceived value
  • motivation
  • financial stake
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