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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often discussed that
water
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 is the backbone of humanity and is an essential need for us. Some say that it should be consumed and provided for everyone without paying bills, which is
for
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free.
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 essay will explain both points of view. On the one hand, when it comes to
water
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 needs, a majority of people say that it is essential. Not only is it important
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also
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it is
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basic human need that should be offered to every person on
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 planet with no exception.
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, they claim that
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 is one of the ways that a human being can survive with and without it
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 if it vanishes from some families, it may lead to sickness and injuries.
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,
water
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 is imperative for people to get cleaned up and avoid having a bad smell.
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, some say that there is no essential need to have access to
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 freely, owing to the fact that it may waste the government's finances, which can have a huge effect on many countries.
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, they aim to lower poverty, and providing access to
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 without paying money may increase it.
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result
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 the world would suffer from the shortage of
water
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. In my opinion, I agree with
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 families who can not pay bills, funds or even their basic needs like food or so. In conclusion,
water
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 is what makes us alive and
purely
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enables us to
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 survive hardships. Let's
al
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at
 least make it easier for people who are in need of it.

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Pick one clear side from the start. You say 'both points of view', but the task asks if you agree or disagree.
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Give a direct answer in the introduction and keep this same view in all body parts.
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Add one or two real and clear examples, such as poor families, dry areas, or health problems from dirty water.
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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are too general and need a clear reason and result.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear plan: introduction, reason 1, reason 2, conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking is not smooth. Use simple words like 'first', 'also', 'because', 'for example', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each body paragraph has one main idea only. Now, some ideas are mixed together.
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Check sentence connection. A few lines are hard to follow because the meaning is not fully clear.
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You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
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You stay on the topic of water in all parts of the essay.
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You try to show more than one side before giving your view.
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You use paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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