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The charts give information about different types of waste disposed of in one country in 1960 and 2011.

The pie charts illustrate information about various types of
waste
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 disposed of (
paper
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, green
waste
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, metal,
glass
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, plastic,
wood
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,
food
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,
textlies
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textiles
, and others) ,in one country in 1960 and 2011.
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, it is clear from the graphs that
paper
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 recorded the highest percentage of
wastes
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waste
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 in 1960, and
lowest
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the lowest
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 was
wood
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.
While
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 the chart
about
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for
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 2011
,
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apply
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 showed that
the
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apply
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food
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 was the most disposed of, and
glass
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 was the lowest
one
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. In terms of 1960, 25% of total
waste
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 disposal was for
paper
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,
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followed
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 by textiles 17%, and 12% for both
food
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 and other. The green
waste
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 was 9%, and 8% for metal and plastic.
Glass
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dispoal
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disposal
 recorded just 5% , and for
wood
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 4%.
in
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In
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 2011,
paper
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 wast lower
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by
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about 10%. In
constract
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contrast
,
food
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 was increased to 21% from all
waste
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. Textiles placed in third place by 11%. Green
waste
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, metal, and
wood
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 were almost reach 9% of the total proportion. After
that
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that,
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 5% for
glass
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, and in the
last
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 place was
othe
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the
waste
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 by 4%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, paper, glass, wood, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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