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In the past, there were strict guidelines about how people should dress for work, but in recent times dress codes seem to have been relaxed. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Previously
, people were given
desscodes
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dresses
 for
work
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 compared to
now
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now,
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 where people wear whatever they like to
work
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.
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 trend has some positive development in building the confidence of the masses. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, it has some drawbacks in the life of the
workers
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. Before now, there were set rules on what to wear to
work
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 daily
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this
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 has helped to condition the
mind
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 of people on what to put on daily, thereby reducing the stress of finding clothes to put on for
work
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.
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,
this
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 has helped with
identifiction
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identification
 of
workers
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 and where they
work
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.
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, bankers
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 their colour code
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 on coperate wears, so anywhere a
paticular
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particular
 colour is seen, it is assumed the
peson
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person
 is a banker.
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, the wearing of
varities
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varieties
 has made individuals
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feel free and showcase their dress sense.
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 it increased lateness to
work
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 as those involved take a lot of time finding which cloth fits.
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,
this
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 has proven to increase unhealthy dressing competitions among
workers
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, which
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 has directly and indirectly made some of them feel inferior in the presence of their colleagues.
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, the use of
dresscode
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dress code
 is still very much preferable to balance
work
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relationship
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relationships
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 among
workers
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 and to increase efficacy without complexity.

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task response
Give a clear answer from the start. Say if this change is good, bad, or both, and keep this view all through the essay.
task response
Add more clear support for each main idea. Some points are short and need more detail.
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Use one strong example that is real and easy to understand. The banker example is not fully clear.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea only. This will help the essay feel more ordered.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it. Some parts change idea too fast.
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You answer the topic and talk about both good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs to separate ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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