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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world and includes predictions for the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the
growth
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 of towns and cities in four different parts of the world
including
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, including
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 predictions for the future.
Overall
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, it is noticed that the
growth
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 rate of the urban
population
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 in Latin America and the Caribbean is
biggest
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the highest
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 within 80 years, and it will reach the maxture in 2030.
By contrast
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, the proportion of
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population
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the population
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 of the towns and cities in Africa was the lowest one in1950
and
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, and
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 after 80 years of hard work, it is still the lowest of the four. From
this
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 chart, we can see the percentage of urban
population
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 in Latin America and the Caribbean is
highest
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higher
 than that
other
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of the other
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 3 compared
area
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areas
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 in 1950, around 38%. And
then
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 it will grow and reach the maxture-80% in 2030.
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, the percentage of
urban
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the urban
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population
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 in
whole
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the whole
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 world was 30% in 1950, and
then
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 increased 18% to reach 48% in 2000, which will
followed
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be followed
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 by a 12%
growth
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 until 2030.
In contrast
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, the proportion of
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population
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the population
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 of the towns and cities in Africa was the lowest one in1950, around 15%, and after 80 years of hard work, it is still the lowest of the four, around 50% in 2030. Meanwhile, the
growth
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 rate of the urban
population
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 in Asia is almost
same
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the same
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 as
Africa
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that in Africa
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, from 16% in 1950 to 38% in 2000, and
then
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 reach 50% in 2030 as well.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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