The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart displays the percentage breakdown of how households in a particular country allocated their weekly
expenditure
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across eight categories in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the way households allocated their income changed significantly over the period.
While
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expenditure
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on
food
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halved, spending on leisure, housing, and transport increased substantially. In 1968, families spent a little over a third of their weekly income on
food
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, making it by far the largest spending category. Housing and clothing each accounted for 10%, and
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food
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, of total
expenditure
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,
whereas
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the remaining five items surveyed each ranged between 6% and 8%.
these
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These
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three categories made up more than half of
total
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the total
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expenditure
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Fifty years later,
although
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food
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still accounted for 17% of household spending,
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figure
halved
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from 1968.
Similarly
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, spending on clothing and footwear dropped from 10% to 5%.
In contrast
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, leisure, which
initially
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represented only 8% of spending, almost tripled to 22%, becoming the largest spending item. Both housing and transport
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saw notable increases, rising from 10% to 19% and from 7% to 14%, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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