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The table below shows the world's ten most expensive countries for petrol along with other financial information. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares the ten most expensive
countries
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 for
petrol
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 in terms of average
income
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,
petrol
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 expenditure, and the
proportion
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 of
income
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 spent on fuel.
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, there are significant differences in the
proportion
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 of
income
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 spent among the ten
countries
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. It is
also
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 clear that some
countries
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,
such
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 as
Eritrea
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 and Turkey, spent a much higher percentage of their
income
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 on
petrol
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,
while
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 others
like
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, like
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Norway
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Norway,
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 allocate a relatively small share. The
proportion
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 of
income
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 spent on
petrol
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 in
Eritrea
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 is the highest, accounting for over 60%,
while
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 Turkey
also
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 records a high figure at around 34%.
In contrast
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, Norway has the
lower
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lowest
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 percentage, at about 7%,followed by Denmark, where the figure is shy of 10%.
In addition
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, several other
countries
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 spend a moderate share, ranging from approximately 10% to around 15%. In terms of
income
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, Norway has the highest average monthly
income
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, at just over $4,000,
whereas
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Eritrea
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 records the lowest, at under $500.
Similarly
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,
petrol
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 expenditure varies across
countries
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, with most nations spending approximately $270 to $320 per month. Notably, despite having a low
income
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,
Eritrea
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 spends a considerable amount on
petrol
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, which
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explains
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 its relatively high
proportion
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 of
income
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 allocated to fuel.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, petrol, income, proportion, eritrea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographical distribution
  • per capita income
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • correlate
  • anomalies
  • impact
  • cost of living
  • transportation
  • external factors
  • oil production rates
  • import dependencies
  • subsidies
  • taxation policies
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