Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Towns and cities around the globe are dealing with a rise in homeless
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. The problem is becoming bigger each year
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and is a result of many factors. The main cause is the cost of accommodation. A lot of major cities like New York face homelessness problems, mainly because of the constant increase in prices of housing
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that many
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simply cannot afford, since their incomes are staying the same. The best strategy is for the governments to encourage property owners to give a place for those without homes. Landlords could be offered small services
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those in need
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giving them a place to live.
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, a farm keeper can give a room to one in exchange for their help with the animals. Another reason for the issue is the shortage of residencies. It can be hard to find something in places like Ireland, because the majority of the land is taken by houses, which possessors are using the situation to make more money.
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, one has to live with a few strangers in a crowded space,
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paying for it way too much than they should. To solve
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, cities should build more blocks with flats, creating many more places to live.
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solution not only makes it possible for folks to live on their own, but it
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stops unfair owners from using
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. In conclusion, the main cause of the problem is money;
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it can be solved with good strategies, care for homeless
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and mindfulness.

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Answer both parts more fully. You give causes and fixes, but some ideas are too short.
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Make your main ideas more clear. Some parts are hard to follow, like the point about owners and land in Ireland.
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Use examples that fit the problem better. The farm example feels unusual for big cities.
coherence and cohesion
Put one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it step by step.
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Use linking words with care. Some links are good, but a few ideas do not join well.
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Check that each sentence clearly connects to the one before it.
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You answer both causes and solutions, so the essay addresses the full task.
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There is a clear start, body, and end.
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You use some clear link words like 'Another reason', 'Consequently', and 'In conclusion'.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homelessness
  • city
  • housing
  • rent
  • cost
  • affordable
  • shelter
  • home
  • poverty
  • income
  • job
  • work
  • wage
  • money
  • plan
  • policy
  • government
  • program
  • service
  • help
  • support
  • health
  • mental health
  • addiction
  • drugs
  • alcohol
  • family
  • violence
  • crime
  • fix
  • solve
  • prevent
  • reduce
  • build
  • provide
  • fund
  • budget
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • improve
  • fair
  • equal
  • rights
  • access
  • system
  • community
  • partner
  • city hall
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