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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

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The graph presents the different ways of requesting information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to
June
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that as time passed closer to
June
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the
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, the
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 most used way of request was by asking in person
and
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, and
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 the least used was by letter or
an
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email. The least used way of asking for information in January was by doing it in person
but
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, but
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 with
time
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time,
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 it drastically jumped up from 450 to about 1900 cases in
June
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. It increased by approximately 1450 times. Communicating by writing a letter started by being in the middle at close to 800,
then
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 it stayed quite stable for two months until March
where
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, when
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 it started to progressively drop
till
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to
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 under 400 in
May
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May,
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 where it remained in
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last
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the last
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 position. Starting in January
the
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, the
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 most popular way of requesting information was by
a
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telephone at about 900 times,
then
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 in February numbers dropped to
800
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800,
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 where it started to increase
till
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to
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 1000 and remained stable for a month. During the period from April to
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June
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June,
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 it increased by 600
starting
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, starting
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 at 1000 and reaching 1600 in
June
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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