The government is looking to demolish an old historic building in City Centre. Write a letter to them expressing your dissatisfaction with this plan. In your letter • say why the building is important • explain the benefits of keeping the building to the city and its residents. • suggest solutions to preserve the building

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the plan to demolish a historical building in my city.
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building left in my area which preserves our culture and heritage. If it is knocked down, the upcoming generation will forget about our roots. Since it is located in the
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of the city, it can attract a number of visitors, which can stimulate the local economy. They will probably spend on local shops, foods and
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. It is
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useful to make the city more beautiful by refurbishing the infrastructure
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. To preserve the building, I would like to suggest some initiatives. If it is converted into a museum and a minimal entrance fee is introduced, a significant amount would be saved to renovate it. Thank you. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur

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Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas need more clear support. Add one more reason why the building matters.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and right for a formal letter. Keep this style in all lines.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter is easy to follow, but some lines are not fully clear. Link ideas with simple words like also, so, and because.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Try to keep one main point in each part. This will make your letter more clear.
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Task response: You cover all three points from the task.
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Task response: You give useful ideas like making it a museum and using a small fee.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are correct for a formal letter.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • historic building
  • city centre
  • local history
  • part of our past
  • special place
  • old design
  • cultural value
  • tourist attraction
  • local business
  • community pride
  • protect heritage
  • repair work
  • careful plan
  • public support
  • future generations
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