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Is it better to live together before marriage? What are your opinions in this?

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For some
people
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,
marriage
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 counts as
one
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 of the milestones in
life
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 and
one
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 of the experiences they want to try and feel by themselves. Factors of it are getting to be with the
one
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 you love or believe as a soulmate, having someone that you can raise and love,
have
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having
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 a
partner
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 that would be by your side till your
last
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 breath. But lately, some believe that
marriage
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 is scary. It is all because of other
people
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's stories and opinions about serious relationships.
That is
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 why they prefer to live
together with
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 the
one
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 they love before stepping into
one
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 of the serious phases in their
life
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, so they won't be shocked by their
partner
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's
behavior
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behaviour
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. The perks of living
together with
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 your
partner
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 are a lot.
For instance
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, you get to know them and understand what their mission in
life
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 is,
then
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 you won't be shocked by how your
partner
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 behaves.
Third,
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you don't have to step into
marriage
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, which is considered scary by some
people
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, to be with the
one
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 you want to spend your
life
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 with. But
then
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 again, not everyone shares the same beliefs. Some say that living
together with
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 your
partner
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 before
marriage
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 is considered a sin and would lead to being pregnant before
marriage
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.
Additionally
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, living with your
partner
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 after being married will lead you to have the same
mision
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mission
 and vision in
life
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. In conclusion, living
together with
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 the
one
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 you belive as your soulmate will make you understand how your
partner
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think
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thinks
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. But
then
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 again, some
people
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 still consider it
as
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a
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 sin and think living together will just create a disaster.

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task response
Give a more clear answer to the question. Say early if you think living together before marriage is good, bad, or good in some cases.
task response
Explain your main ideas more. Some points are short, so the reader wants more detail.
task response
Use one or two real and clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words in a careful way. Some words like 'Third' do not fit well because there is no clear first and second point.
coherence cohesion
Make the ideas connect more smoothly from one sentence to the next.
task response
You answer the topic and talk about both good and bad sides of living together before marriage.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly easy to understand.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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