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Some believe that protecting the environment is the responsibility of individuals, while others think that governments and large companies should take the lead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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argue
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 between
people
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 whether
people
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 take the responsibility to protect the environment or
governments
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 and large companies need to take into
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account
 saving
the
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apply
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nature.
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governments
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 and companies can make big changes
implementing
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 ecofriendly produucing methods and taxes on wasted materials, I think that every
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people
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person
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 should take into consideration to support the environment.
Whithout
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Without
 a doubt,
governments
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 play an important role
to protect the
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 nature and have more power to make large changes. If
governments
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 introduce laws to cut trees which can absorb Carbon dioxide through
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photosynthesis
 and create clean public transport,
people
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 are less likely to cut logs and use private cars
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 has
great
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 impact on air pollution.
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, they
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can contribute to
restore the
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restoring
 nature

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Answer both sides more fully. Now you talk more about the government side, but the ideas about individuals are very short.
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Give your opinion in a clear way and support it with one or two simple reasons.
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Add a short conclusion at the end to finish the essay and restate your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphing: one intro, one body for governments and companies, one body for individuals, and one conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, because, so, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each main point with a clear example or result so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
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You clearly show the topic and your opinion in the introduction.
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You give a relevant idea about laws and public transport to help the environment.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas generally move in a logical order.
coherence and cohesion
You use cause and result in some parts, such as laws leading to less pollution.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • protect the environment
  • individual responsibility
  • take the lead
  • daily actions
  • save water
  • use less plastic
  • public transport
  • recycle waste
  • at home
  • small steps
  • make a big difference
  • good habits
  • start at home
  • waste food
  • save power
  • care for nature
  • green way of life
  • large change
  • create laws
  • cut pollution
  • air pollution
  • water pollution
  • clean energy
  • wind power
  • solar power
  • key role
  • large companies
  • reduce waste
  • clean technology
  • eco-friendly products
  • on a bigger scale
  • control money
  • public support
  • environmental policy
  • more successful
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