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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture illustrates the
changes
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 of museum’s plan in 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, the museum had undergone substantial renovations, with a significant addition of new facilities.
In particular
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, some areas of permanent
exhibition
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 were replaced by a restaurant, a cafe, and a temporary
exhibition
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 room. One of the most significant
changes
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 was the renovation in the west wing of the museum, with almost half of the permanent
exhibition
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 transformed into a temporary
exhibition
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 and a restaurant in the north-east wing.
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, a cafe sitting
area
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 was provided to share the
area
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 of the previous courtyard,
while
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 some part of the cafe was replaced with a toilet.
Moreover
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, another significant
changes
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 was appeared in 2008, the temporary
exhibition
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 gained almost twice larger spaces when compared with 1998. Two fountains were
also
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 added into courtyard in 2008. In terms of relocation functions, a shop
area
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 and bag&coats room were relocated from the south-east wing to the west, remaining the same accessible from the entrance
area
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.
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, the ticket
area
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 was the only space that did not experience any
changes
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make your main ideas more clear in each part. Some lines are hard to follow.
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Use better linking words, and check word order in long sentences.
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Report changes in a more exact way. A few points are not fully clear or fully correct.
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Add more key details from both maps and compare them in a simpler way.
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You give a clear overall view of the main changes.
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You mention many important changes, like the cafe, restaurant, and temporary room.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic intro, overview, and detail parts.
coherence and cohesion
You use some comparison words like 'however' and 'in addition'.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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