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More and more plastic is polluting the oceans. What problems are caused by plastic waste? What can be done to solve this problem?

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UnSustainable
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Unsustainable
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 methods
has
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have
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 a crucial role in our life,
that
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 includes pollution in the Air from Greengas or even by throwing waste in the oceans like
plastic
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. In the following
pharagraphs
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paragraphs
, we will discuss the negative impact and some methods to resolve
this
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 problem. The usage of
Plastic
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 and throwing it in the
ocean
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had effected
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 all sorts of living creatures in the
ocean
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such
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, such
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 as turtles, fish, and
dolphines
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dolphins
. The reason behind it is that these creatures are unable to detect whether a specific object can be used as food or not,
therefore
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 they consume it
which
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 would
ultimatly
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ultimately
 negatively affect their
diegestive
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digestive
 system.
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,
this
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 will increase their chance of dying or even
poorly living
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living poorly
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,
such
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 as the attachment
on
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to
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 their body parts.
For example
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, the
incedent
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incident
 that
accured
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occurred
 in the Red Sea, where a group of
scientests
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scientists
 inspected the
ocean
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 and discovered that 8% of a specific area in the Red Sea
have
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apply
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had
cretures
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creatures
 that were injured, like a small
dolphine
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dolphin
 that had a
plastic
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 bag around its neck, which caused difficulty
to swim
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.  All these problems need to be solved by using
varous
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various
 methods.
First,
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we must raise the
awarness
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awareness
 of the global issue
that is
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effecting
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affecting
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 the
ocean
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, because most individuals
dont
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don't
 realise how much
this
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 would cost us
not
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, not
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 only in the short term but
also
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 in the next generation.
Second,
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we need to increase our usage of more sustainable objects
even
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, even
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 as small as using a metal straw
instead
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 of a
plastic
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 one
, even
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. Even
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 though
its
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it's
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 a small change
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this
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, this
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 would increase the protection in the oceans. In fact, every person who stops using a
plastic
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 straw raises the protection of sea creatures
approximately
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by approximately
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 by 12%. In conclusion,
There
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there
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 are so many practices that we can develop in a more sustainble ways.
However
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, it would be better to start with the small things so that people can have
awarness
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awareness
 and
then
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 begin
transfering
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transferring
 to larger stuff.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully: explain more problems and more ways to solve them.
coherence cohesion
Make your main idea in each body paragraph very clear at the start.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, as a result, and finally.
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Give examples that are clear and easy to trust.
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Develop each point with one clear reason and one clear result.
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You answered both questions in the task.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use an example to support your idea about harm to sea animals.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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