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The chart below shows the milk export figures from three European countries (Italy, Russia, and Poland) between 2008 and 2012.

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The bar chart compares the share of
milk
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 exports from three countries – Italy,
Russia
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, and
Poland
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 from 2008 to 2012. The chart reveals significant fluctuations in the
milk
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-exporting of
Russia
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 and
Poland
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, with
Russia
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 experiencing substantial increases, followed by sharp declines,
whereas
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Poland
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initially
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 decreased noticeably,
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 the figure indicated a marked rise in the following years. In Italy,
milk
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 exports remained stable with a minor growth over the given timeframe. Of particular note is that
Russia
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 stood out as the leading
country
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 for the figures of
milk
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 exporting throughout the
period
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, despite seeing a significant drop in the subsequent years; the reverse was true for
Poland
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, which remained the lowest
milk
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-exporting
country
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, albeit with a substantial increase
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Russia
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 and
Poland
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 followed comparable patterns, with
Russia
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 rising significantly in the initial years from almost 25% in 2008 to nearly 35% in 2009, before jumping to its all-time high of 40% in 2010.
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, in
this
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period
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,
Poland
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 saw a marked decline from approximately 13% in 2008 to about 8% in 2009, followed by another noticeable drop to around 5% in 2010. From
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 midpoint, contrasting positions were observed in both trends, with
Russia
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 experiencing a sharp decline toward the end of the
period
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 to roughly 28% in 2012,
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Poland
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 grew dramatically to nearly 15% in 2012.
However
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,
Russia
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 showed a pronounced descent,
while
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Poland
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 recorded a sharp growth; that of the former remains the highest
milk
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 exporting
country
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, and that of the latter continues to be the lowest exporting
country
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. Turning to Italy’s export share, there were almost no noticeable changes,
stabilizing
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 at around 17% between 2008 and 2009, before experiencing a slight increase to approximately 20% in 2010.
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 the figure displayed a steady rise by 1% until the end of the timeframe, reaching 21%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, russia, poland, country, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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