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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.

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The two plans illustrate how the ground floor of a
library
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 changed between 2001 and 2009.
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, the
library
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 underwent significant redevelopment over
this
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 period, with the addition of new facilities and a more modern layout, making it more functional and user-friendly. In 2001, the librarian’s desk was positioned directly opposite the entrance. In the
center
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 of the
library
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, there were eight tables,
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 a room for newspapers and periodicals was located on the right-hand
side
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. On the left
side
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, there were two separate areas
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 a self-help
section
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 near the entrance and a history
section
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 next to it. The fiction area occupied the top part of the
library
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.
Stairs
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 were situated in the bottom right corner. By 2009, the layout had been considerably
reorganized
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. One major change was the introduction of computers, which were placed near the
center-right
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 area. The former newspapers and periodicals room was converted into a films and DVDs
section
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. On the left
side
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, the previous self-help and history areas were replaced by several smaller sections, including history, fiction, self-help, kitchen, economics, and law.
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, the number of tables was reduced and relocated to the right
side
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 of the
library
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, near a newly created children’s area. The fiction
section
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 at the top was removed to make space for
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 new arrangement.
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, the librarian’s desk, entrance, and stairs remained unchanged.

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Add one or two more small change points to make the full picture more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use more direct compare words like 'while', 'but', and 'in contrast' to link old and new parts.
coherence and cohesion
Group changes by area a bit more clearly, for example left side, center, and right side.
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Say a little more about what was removed, not only what was added.
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You give a clear overview of the main changes.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas move in a logical order from 2001 to 2009.
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You mention key new parts like computers and the children’s area.
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Your linking is clear and easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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