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The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now

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The maps give detailed information about how
city
Correct article usage
the city
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 has developed since 1950.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there
has
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have
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 been dramatic changes in the structure of
city
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the city
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particularly
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, particularly
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 in the development of
airport
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the airport
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,
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apply
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 and
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lake
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the lake
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. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that
river
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the river
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,
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apply
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 and
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business
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the business
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district
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has
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have
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 remained more or less
changed
Verb problem
unchanged
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 over the given period. In 1950, looking at the details, the
business
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district
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 was located in
middle
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the middle
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 of the layout.
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 the major road was crossed from west to east, and south to north sides
and
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, and
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this
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 structure looks like
shape
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the shape
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 of
plus
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a plus
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.
there
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There
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 were residential area which were next to
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business
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the business
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district
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.
while
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 the airport was situated on
east
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the east
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side
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 of
map
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the map
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.
looking
Fix capitalization
Looking
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 at the
river
Punctuation problem
river,
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was occupied
Correct determiner usage
the
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 bottom of
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business
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the business
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district
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, and
Verb problem
was occupied, and
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 there was
bridge
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a bridge
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for
Change preposition
to
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 connect the major road in centre
side
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. In a city with a population of 20,000 in the given years Until now, there
were changed
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have been changes
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,and
added
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apply
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new novelties, namely,
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lake
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a lake
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 was built though river next to the
business
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district
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. At the same time, a dam was built on the east
side
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 of the
lake
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 to hold back the water.
Lake
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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and
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business
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the business
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district
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 surrounded by
residential
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a residential
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 area
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was expanded.
while
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 airport was
also
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broaden
Wrong verb form
broadened
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, but in
such
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place
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a place
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.
whereas
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government
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the government
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 building
odd
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is
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 on
south
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the south
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side
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 of
layout
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the layout
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.
Bridge
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The bridge
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 was
also
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 expanded to accommodate
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Lake
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the lake
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. The number of people who are capable of
such
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 development has
also
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 increased 10 fold.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lake, business, district, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • map
  • 1950
  • now
  • old
  • new
  • house
  • houses
  • road
  • roads
  • street
  • streets
  • lane
  • block
  • blocks
  • park
  • parks
  • garden
  • gardens
  • shop
  • shops
  • market
  • markets
  • school
  • hospital
  • church
  • center
  • center
  • train
  • bus
  • rail
  • bridge
  • river
  • water
  • edge
  • centre
  • grow
  • growth
  • change
  • changed
  • expand
  • build
  • built
  • replace
  • replaced
  • there
  • there is
  • there are
  • now there are
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