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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a music festival for the first time this summer. He/She has asked fot your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Explain why you think he/she would enjoy music festivals - Describe some problems he/she might have - say if you would like to join your friend

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Dear James, How are you? I'm writing to give you a few tips about your music festival. I'm sure you'll really enjoy it, especially since one of your favourite musicians, YOYO, is performing on Friday night.
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, there will be various fun activities, and you might even win some exciting prizes.
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, there are a few things you should keep in mind. The weather can be a bit awful, so I recommend bringing an umbrella just in case. You should
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 were suitcable shoes because the ground can get quite slippery. Another important thing is to carry your government ID, as you may need it for entry and for using public transport, since regular bus service might be limited that day. By the way, I'm free on Friday and would love to join you if you'd like some
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. It would be great to experience the festival together. Let me know what you think. Cheers, Marie

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Add one more line about why music festivals are fun for all the senses, not only one singer.
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Say a bit more about the problems, like long lines, loud sound, or high food cost.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words like also, so, and because to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point only.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word mistakes like were, suitcable, and comany because they can slow the reader.
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You answer all three parts of the task.
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Your tone is warm and friendly for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Greeting and closing are natural and good.
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