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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

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The illustration depicts the changes in
the
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Darwin's waterfront area from the year 2009
and in the year
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to
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 2014. In general, there
has
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have
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 been
few
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a few
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 major changes in the development,
particulary
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particularly
 in infrastructure, with a new harbour, an additional swimming pool, a shed,
as well as
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 some new nature features have been added.
Moreover
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, many parts of the section
remaned
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remained
 the same
fot
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for
 the period of time. Regarding the newly added harbour
that is
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 located
in
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on
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 the east side of the town,
in
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by
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 the sea and near the second smallest swimming pool, there is a new
path
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 that stretches from east to west of the town.
Furthermore
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, the
path
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 is surrounded by a newly grown
forest
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forest,
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in which place
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where
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 previously was an industrial zone. On top of the
path
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there have been added three new sheds
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, three new sheds have been added
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of the city
making
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, making
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it
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the
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 total
of
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number of
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6 sheds toghether,
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sheds 6 together. To
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as well as
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 to the left
from
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of
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 the
sheds
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sheds,
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there has been constructed a new building
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a new building has been constructed
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.
Moreover
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,
while
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 the largesr are was converted
in to
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into
 a forest, the
smallet
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smallest
 industrial are on the south side
in
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, in
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 the middle of the rounded
path
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, there has been constructed a
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. A
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 new and the smallest swimming pool
from
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of
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 the three
.
Verb problem
has been constructed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words path with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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