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The maps below show the changes in area after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate 20 years of alteration of a riverine field before and after a
dam
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constructed
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was constructed
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 in 2000. Generally speaking, it can be observed that major changes take place in that area, particularly the expansion of the water body and the introduction of new facilities, including a
dam
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, lodge, power plant, and fishing field.
Otherwise
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, some of
original
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the original
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 sceneries and fields are removed, and the village is relocated. In 1980, the original river
flew
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flowed
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 from the northern to the southern part. In the upstream, there were mountains with forest and
a
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an
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 ancient
structures
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structure
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, meanwhile, in the downstream, there was a village, irrigated farmland, and
the
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apply
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rare plants and animals
was
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apply
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inhabited. After a
dam
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 construction
take
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took
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 place in 2000,
it is clear that
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 there were major transformations. The noticeable change was the extension of
water
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the water
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 body (lake), after
hydroelectric
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a hydroelectric
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dam
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 was built to manage the accumulation flow of the stream,
as well as
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 the implementation of
a
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apply
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fishing and electricity facilities.
However
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, several original sceneries,
for example
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: forest, ancient
building
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buildings
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, rare plants and animal
habitat
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habitats
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, and the farmland were no longer there.
Nonetheless
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, the prior village was relocated to the southern part,
while
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 a hotel was introduced at that place.
Moreover
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, the mountains and
southern
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the southern
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 river were the only unchanged features.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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