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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, choosing where to
work
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 is very important. Some people think it is better to
work
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 for a big
company
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 than a small
company
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.
While
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a
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apply
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big
companies
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 have many good points. I believe that both a large
company
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 and a small
company
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 have their own benefit. On the one hand, the large
companies
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 provide excellent
financially
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financial
 support. They usually offer higher salaries and better insurance
compare
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compared
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 to small
companies
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.
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 is because they have a large budget to attract talented people.
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, employees feel more secure and can better
concentrated
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concentrate
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 on their
work
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 without worrying about money problems.
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, big
companies
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 are good for learning
,
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.
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 They have training for new staff to help them understand the business .
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help
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helps
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 workers learn many skills.
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, you can learn how to
work
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 with foreigners.
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 experience is great for your future career because it makes your resume look professional when you apply for a higher position later. In conclusion, I agree that working in
large
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a large
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company
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 is the best choice for many people. It does not provide
s
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a
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 high income and benefits
but
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, but
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also
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 gives employees a chance to improve themselves.
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, if someone wants a stable and successful career, they should choose to
work
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 for a large
organization
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organisation
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.

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task response
Make your main idea one clear line from start to end. At first, you say both large and small companies are good, but later you fully agree with large companies. Choose one view and keep it all the way.
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Add one more clear example to support your ideas. You give only one short example about working with foreigners. A more real and full example will make your points stronger.
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Explain your ideas a little more. For example, say why training in a large company helps workers get better jobs later.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. Some parts join well, like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', but some sentences stop too fast or have weak links.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph flow. Put one main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it, then give an example. This will make the essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Fix small grammar and word form problems because they can make meaning less clear, for example 'a big companies', 'compare to', and 'This help workers'.
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You answer the topic clearly and give your opinion in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear basic structure: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
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Your main ideas are easy to understand: money, safety, and learning at work.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words well, such as 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', 'As a result', and 'Therefore'.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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