The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008

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The pie charts
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the
comparsion
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comparison
between the household spending on different things (
Food
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&
drinks
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, Utility
bills
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, Transport,
Leisure
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and
Others
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) in
UK
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the UK
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and New Zealand, in the years 1980 and 2008.
Overall
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, in the UK
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leisure
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, leisure
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made up the largest segment over the time period.
While
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in New Zealand it was varied, as it was in
1980
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1980,
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food
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and
drinks
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, but
then
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it changed to be utility
bills
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making
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the biggest contribution
in
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the spending of
familes
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families
.
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Others
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category was exactly the same for
both
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countries in 1980 and 2008. For
United
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the United
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Kingdom, all of
utility
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the utility
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bills
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,
leisure
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and
others
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experienced a surge
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percentage-wise
, varying in the size of
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the change
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.
Leisure
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made the highest contribution from 27% in 1980 to 34% in 2008.
In contrast
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, the charts showed a slight decline in
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food
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the food
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&
drinks
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and transport
category
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categories
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of 2% and 1%,
respectivly
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respectively
. In 1980,
food
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and
drinks
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made up the most significant part in households expenditure accounted for 29%,
although
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it fell by about 5%.
Similarly
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,
both
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transport and
leisure
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had
both
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decreased by 1% from 18% and 17% to 17% and 16% over three decades.
While
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both
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utiltiy
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utility
bills
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and
others
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had
riseover
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risen over
time.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drinks, bills, leisure, others, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spending
  • share
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • year
  • country
  • food
  • housing
  • rent
  • health
  • education
  • leisure
  • money
  • income
  • budget
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • across
  • between
  • overall
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