You reside ina shared college room. However, numerous issues with this setup make it challenging for you to work. You rite a letter to the college's accommodation officer. In your letter Describe the current situation Explain the problems and why it hinders your work Suggest the type of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
regarding
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my current living
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. Frankly speaking, the accommodation itself is perfect,
my
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but my
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roommate
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has become unbearable, making it difficult for me to have a quiet moment in the room as I attain maximum concentration on my school work at night. I hope due consideration is given to
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situation. Let me explain my situation. The problem started 2 months ago when my current
roommate
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moved in.
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everything was normal between me and my former
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, who was very reasonable and
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things moderate. My recent
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,
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,
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to be the direct opposite, who stays up all night and plays incessantly loud music. As
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, I have not been able to sleep enough and
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had a negative effect on my school work, as he made it impossible for me to study at night. I am kindly requesting that
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my roommate and I be
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transferred to another room.
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, if I am the one to move out, I would appreciate
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a
quite
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room and to live with someone who will be
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mindful of the other person he is staying
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Thank you for your consideration, as I hope
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situation is acted upon urgently. Yours faithfully, Salieu Barrie.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more about the room you want.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone polite all the way. Some lines are a little too strong.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow. To make it better, use clearer linking words like 'first', 'because', and 'therefore'.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check small grammar and word form errors, because they can make ideas less clear.
task response
Task response: You clearly describe the problem, explain its effect on your study, and ask for a new room.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shared room
  • accommodation officer
  • current situation
  • roommate
  • little space
  • noisy
  • quiet place
  • study time
  • hard to focus
  • disturbed sleep
  • course work
  • finish work on time
  • prepare for tests
  • single room
  • move to another room
  • study-friendly
  • consider my request
  • as soon as possible
  • thank you for your help
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