The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present

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The map illustrates the stage of development the village in Ryemouth had in the years 1995 to the present.
Overall
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, the village had slight changes
transforming
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, transforming
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it
to
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into
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a holiday resort. Some
facilites
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facilities
were removed,
while
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others were introduced over the time period. In 1995, the place had many features like shops in the south centre and a fish market in the far south-west.
However
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, over
time
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time,
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those features were
exchanged
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replaced
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by other ones.
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, apartments replaced the shop area, making it
high-density
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a high-density
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residential area. Another example is
farmland
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the farmland
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and forest park changed to golf and tennis, which increased the amount of activities
making
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, making
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it more
intresting
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interesting
for all ages.
While
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other things
where
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were
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removed permentatly
for
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example
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example,
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the fishing port in the
south
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southern
part of the village.
Moreover
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, the features that
was
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were
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introduced in the area
was
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were
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car parks
in
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on
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the east side of the hotel
allowing
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, allowing
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more residents
come
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to come
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to it,
also
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one
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a
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linking street was added beside the trees in the west.
Lastly
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, some trees in the far northwestern part were relocated around the
new
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newly
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invented street.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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