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The graph shows the number of international students enrolled in universities in four different countries from 2000 and 2020.

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The graph shows the number of international students enrolled in universities in four different countries from 2000 and 2020.
The line graph illustrates the number of international students enrolled in
UK
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the UK
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,
US
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the US
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, Australia and Canada
universities
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apply
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from 2000
and
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to
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 2020.
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,
The
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the
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 USA is showing
upward
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an upward
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 trend in enrollment
and
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, and
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rest
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the rest
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 of the countries have made some progress and fluctuations. There was a slight growth in
number
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the number
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 of enrollments in
US
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the US
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 from 2000 to
2009
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2009,
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 followed by moderate progress till 2014.
Additional
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Additionally
, the enrollment continued to grow at the same level
which
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, which
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 is similar to
a
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the
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 first quarter. The
university
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University
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 pushed enrollments from 1000 students to 2000 from 2000 to 2017. Australian universities had some fluctuations starting from 2000 to 2016 from 800 to 1400
children
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students
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 respectively. Canada represented the marginal
grow
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growth
 of admissions for
first
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the first
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 eight years from 600 to 950. The country has shown some significant growth till 2017. Admissions in Canadian
university
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universities
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 minimally rose from 700 to 1500 students by diverging
Australia
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from Australia
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 in 2014 and grew largely towards the end of 2017.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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