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The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999

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The line graph shows the percentage of US households owning five types of technology—washing machines, computers, DVD players, telephones and Internet access—between 1995 and 1999.
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, ownership of all technologies increased over the period. The most significant growth was seen in Internet access and telephones,
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 washing machines remained the most common household item throughout. Washing machines were already the most common in 1995 at about 62%, rising steadily to around 80% by 1999. Computer ownership
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 grew consistently from roughly 45% to nearly 70% over the same period. Telephones rose sharply from about 25% to over 75%. Internet access increased from 10% to around 50% by 1999. DVD players fluctuated, falling to 15% in 1996 before recovering to about 45%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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