The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant,.

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The line graph comparisons percentage of
househols
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households
with different kinds of technology in the US between 1995 and 1999.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there were five kinds of technology
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such
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, such
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as washing
machine
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machines
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,
computer
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computers
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, DVD
player , phone
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players, phones,
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and
internet
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the internet
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.
Graph
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The graph
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shows that there was a general increase in all categories, despite some minor fluctuations in the middle of the period. In 1995 ,
washing
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the number of washing
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machine
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machines
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significantly increased in 1999 in the US.
Wasching
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Washing
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machines were already the most common in 1995 at about 62%, rising
staedily
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steadily
to around 80% by 1999.Computer were started at 45% in 1995
,
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however
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however,
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this
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increasing
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increased
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steadily to approximately 70% in 1999. Phone
were
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usage
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started at about 20 % in 1995, but
rising
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rose
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significantly
at
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to
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about 78% in 1999. DVD player was already
in
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apply
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common in 1995
at
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, with
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approximately 9% in 1995
and
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, and
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this
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significantly
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increased significantly
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48% in 1999.
While
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,
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the
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Internet was started at about 35% in 1995,
this
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figure was slightly
drip
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dropped
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in 1996, but
then
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it grow at about 52% in 1999.

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