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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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People have different perspectives on whether governments should exempt
water
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 charges
to
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for
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 every household in terms of a basic human
rights
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right
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.
Although
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 there are some benefits to both sides,
this
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 essay will discuss that every home should pay for using clean
water
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. On the one hand, if there are
citizens
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 who cannot afford to access
to
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apply
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clean
water
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,
government
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the government
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 have a duty to
assistance
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assist
 them as
an
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a
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 universal welfare. We
are
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apply
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live in
21st
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the 21st
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 century, all countries are developed enough to help someone who suffers from contaminated
water
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. That's the reason why governments exist.
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, governments have duties to protect their
citizens
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. Tax should be used to that kinds of
purpose
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purposes
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. At least, basic human rights should be guaranteed.
On the other hand
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,
To
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to
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 supply clean
water
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 exempting utility
fee
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fees
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 to everyone by using
tax
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taxes
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 is inappropriate. It would be a tremendous burden to
citizens
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. If
water
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 using changed to free, people might use
water
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without frugal
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more frugally
. Nobody tries to save and conserve
water
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.
In addition
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
citizens
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 can afford to pay their
water
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 bill,
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then
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so
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 why
government should
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should the government
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 exempt their fees
.
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 It might
leads
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lead
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 to more tax expenses to consider
environment
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the environment
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 and supply. In conclusion, it is an intertwined issue which has no clear-cut answers.
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, I am convinced that if people can use
water
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 freely, it
makes
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creates
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 another
drawbacks
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drawback
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.
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Therefore
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 I fully disagree with free of charge. Government have to
remain
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maintain
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 utility fees for
water
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, and they can provide selective welfare by exempting charges to
less-income
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low-income
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 households.

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Make your main view more clear from the start. Say one clear answer and keep it the same all through the essay.
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Add one or two real and clear examples to support each main point.
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Explain your ideas more. Some points are good, but they need one more step of why or how.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple and natural way, such as on the one hand, on the other hand, for example, and therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each body paragraph to one main idea. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar so your meaning is easier to understand.
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You answer the question and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words to show both sides of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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