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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

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The given map shows the big changes in Beechwood
Farm
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 between 1950 and today. There are four outstanding changes.
To begin
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 with, in the north-east areas
of
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,
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 sheep
has
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have
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 been demolished.
Then
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 newly constructed spaces
are appeared
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appear
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. Solar panels, two parking lots and
camping
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a camping
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 filed is newly constructed.
Second,
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Barn which was located below the sheep
area
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area,
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 was moved to
middle
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the middle
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 of
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farm
Correct article usage
the farm
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. There was a track road to get
the
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to the
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 barn in 1950, but now it
was
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has been
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 changed to roads. Areas for cultivating fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables in
south-west
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the south-west
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 part
were
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have
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 remained until today.
Also
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,
Farmhouse
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the Farmhouse
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 and chickens
farm
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 in
south-east
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the south-east
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are remained
Wrong verb form
remain
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. The river below these four parts remains. At the side of
east
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the east
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 and west
area
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areas
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, there are two newly constructed spaces. The one on the east side is a
farm
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 shop,
the
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and the
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 opposite
site
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side
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 is the holiday cottages. There are so many differences between 1950 and today.

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Write a clear overview after the first line. Say the main changes in one or two sentences.
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Use more exact words for place and change. For example, say what was removed, what stayed, and what was added.
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Do not add wrong detail. Check each part of the map very carefully before you write.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area in a clear way, for example north, center, south, then east and west.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, next, while, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence complete and easy to follow. Some lines now are hard to understand.
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You gave an opening sentence that tells the topic of the map.
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You noticed some key changes, like the new shop, holiday homes, and solar panels.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to compare past and present in each part of the farm.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphing, which helps the reader see different groups of ideas.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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