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The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates how the daily consumption of three spreads ( margarine,
low fat
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low-fat
 and reduced spread, and
butter
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) per person changed over
a
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the
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 period from 1981 to 2007 in a country.
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, it is immediately apparent that
butter
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 was the highest consumption at the
begging
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beginning
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 of the period,
while
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 margarine showed a
proximately
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relatively
 stable average throughout the given years.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
low fat
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low-fat
 and reduced spreads just started
at
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in
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 the
last
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 decade from the period. In the early years,
butter
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 started at 140
grams
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 in 1981 and
then
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 experienced a steady rise to reach a peak
160
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of 160
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grams
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 by 1986. The
butter
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 had
dropd
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dropped
 to
low
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less
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 than 60
grams
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at the end
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 of the given time. Meanwhile, margarine remained relatively stable, fluctuating marginally between about 100
grams
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 and 40 grrams. By 1996,
low fat
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low-fat
 and reduced spreads had risen dramatically
untill
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until
 2001,
then
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its
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they
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 underwent a sharp decrease in 2007.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words butter, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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