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The given maps compare the changes that took place at a city hospital in 2 different years,2007 and 2010

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The maps compare the transformation of
road
Use synonyms
 infrastructure leading to a city hospital after three years of construction (2007-2010). Generally speaking,
it is clear that
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 major modernisation
take
Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
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 place in the hospital, with
an
Correct article usage
the
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 introduction of roundabouts,
separated
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a separated
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 parking service, and
development
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the development
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a
Change preposition
of a
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bus station becoming the highlights. Meanwhile, several features stay the same.
According to
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 the diagrams, it can be observed that a noticeable change was the introduction of two roundabouts in the northern and southern intersections,
enhancing
Verb problem
resulting in a transition
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 from
single
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a single
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 to
dual-carriageway
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a dual-carriageway
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.
Moreover
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, six bus stops were completely removed, and replaced with a large bus station in the western area of hospital
road
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, which had two
enters
Replace the word
entrances
 connecting to
the
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apply
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those roundabouts.
On the other hand
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, parking facilities had been improved by separating the previous joint car park,
which
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and
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 a large public car park was built in the eastern area of
hospital
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the hospital
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 building,
while
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staff
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the staff
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 car park was placed in the same location. Maintaining their shapes and locations, in comparison, the ring
road
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, hospital building, a city motorway, and hospital
road
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 were
ramained
Correct your spelling
remained
 unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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