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The three pie charts below show changes in annual spending at a public school in Canada in 1990, 2000, and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The three pie graphs illustrate differences
of
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 annual spending for a public school in Canada for the
years
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 90s ,2000,and 2010.
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, the common spending for all the
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 teacher's salaries was the highest by nearly
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half. It can be seen that
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 technology began to increase slightly over
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time. In detail,
teachers's
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teachers'
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 salaries by 1990
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was
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were
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 around
above the
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half, after 10
years
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later
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,
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 declined with 5%, and
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 in 2010,
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 by 5%,
also
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constant
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a constant
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 pattern of decreasing. The second highest was facilities and maintenance by 1900, was 15%, but
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 after that increased gradually with 5%
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 every 10
years
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.
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, learning and resources
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 stable for the
enire
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entire
years
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 with 10%, without any remarkable shift.
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to
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, technology showed a little growth in the
last
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 20
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 compared to
1900s
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the 1900s
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.
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, spending money
for
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on
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 other items in 1990 was almost 15%, but started to go down every 10
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, until
reached
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it reached
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 8%.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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