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The chart below shows the donations given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 graph describes the amount of charity, which was provided to Social Welfare, Education, Environment, Health, Wildlife, and Arts by one company during 2012-2014. The units are measured in
thousands
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 of
dollars
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Social Welfare had the largest investments, reaching nearly 20
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thousands of
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thousand
dollars
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 from 2012 to 2014.
On the other hand
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, the other spheres had less investment,
flactuating
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fluctuating
 from 3 to 9
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thousands of
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thousand
dollars
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. Moving to more detailed analysis, it might be seen that in Social Welfare, Health, Wildlife, and Arts
spheres
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spheres,
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 the highest donations were in 2014. In comparison, Education and Environment had their peak
at
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in
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 2012, with nearly 8
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thousands of
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thousand
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dollars
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.
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, it is significant to mention that generally
company's
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the company's
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 support remained stable in all
of
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apply
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three years, without any giant
dawnfalls
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downturns
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 or rises.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thousands, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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